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Mr. Money in the Bank
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Post by ASW on Jan 26, 2014 17:19:30 GMT -5
Hello, I've been fedding on YouTube for about a year now, and before that 2 years of fedding. I feel like this has been my best work so far. Thanks for looking!
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Wicked
The Man of a Thousand Questions
'The Nightmare Warrior'
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Post by Wicked on Jan 26, 2014 23:56:49 GMT -5
This is the first time I watched your fed. I didn't think it was that bad. Some of it I liked and other parts were weaker. As I said for Zee try to work on Posing and match flow. Good job.
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Mr. Money in the Bank
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Post by ASW on Jan 27, 2014 9:10:54 GMT -5
This is the first time I watched your fed. I didn't think it was that bad. Some of it I liked and other parts were weaker. As I said for Zee try to work on Posing and match flow. Good job. Thanks |
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gabe
I am shrimp
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Post by gabe on Jan 27, 2014 9:32:33 GMT -5
Enjoyable show but there is room for improvement. In the first match, some of the sequences between Bryan and Sabin left me confused, and there is too much zooming in on the kicks to head by both Bryan and Shelley. Some stiff in there. When it was announced that Lita was not competing, there was no follow up to that and why she wouldn't compete. All that there was was just Trish standing blankly in the ring lol. You could have at least said that "we will get a new Women's Champion soon." One thing I found odd during the 5-Man match was that Aries and Magnus fought in the beginning of the match and then everyone else is still just standing and staring in the background. Make it look like there is stuff going on all around during a multi-man match, same with the RR. Didn't see an Edge win coming but it was cool, it just didn't make sense to me that both men were eliminated at the same time but Edge still ended up winning just because he was the one who did the spear. Overall, work on what Richard said, try to work on posing and match flow because then some of the sequences will make a lot more sense and watch how other feds do the moves compared to how they are done so that it will look realistic. Also, don't zoom in so much on moves when there is a roundhouse kick or something else, and bend the joints especially for Deluxe figures and Elite figures, they are meant to do that. 7/10!
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Mr. Money in the Bank
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Post by ASW on Jan 27, 2014 11:29:38 GMT -5
Enjoyable show but there is room for improvement. In the first match, some of the sequences between Bryan and Sabin left me confused, and there is too much zooming in on the kicks to head by both Bryan and Shelley. Some stiff in there. When it was announced that Lita was not competing, there was no follow up to that and why she wouldn't compete. All that there was was just Trish standing blankly in the ring lol. You could have at least said that "we will get a new Women's Champion soon." One thing I found odd during the 5-Man match was that Aries and Magnus fought in the beginning of the match and then everyone else is still just standing and staring in the background. Make it look like there is stuff going on all around during a multi-man match, same with the RR. Didn't see an Edge win coming but it was cool, it just didn't make sense to me that both men were eliminated at the same time but Edge still ended up winning just because he was the one who did the spear. Overall, work on what Richard said, try to work on posing and match flow because then some of the sequences will make a lot more sense and watch how other feds do the moves compared to how they are done so that it will look realistic. Also, don't zoom in so much on moves when there is a roundhouse kick or something else, and bend the joints especially for Deluxe figures and Elite figures, they are meant to do that. 7/10! Thanks Gabe! I looked back at it and realized some parts were confusing and missing. Definitely a lot of things to work on. Next show will be better. |
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Mr. Money in the Bank
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Post by ASW on Jan 27, 2014 11:47:43 GMT -5
Edge won because he threw Punk over the ropes and then speared him through. I get that it was confusing, was using that finish to start a Punk/Edge feud.
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gabe
I am shrimp
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Post by gabe on Jan 27, 2014 11:54:45 GMT -5
Edge won because he threw Punk over the ropes and then speared him through. I get that it was confusing, was using that finish to start a Punk/Edge feud. Now I see, hopefully this will be a good feud! Can't wait till next show man! |
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Mr. Money in the Bank
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Post by ASW on Jan 27, 2014 12:12:28 GMT -5
Edge won because he threw Punk over the ropes and then speared him through. I get that it was confusing, was using that finish to start a Punk/Edge feud. Now I see, hopefully this will be a good feud! Can't wait till next show man! Thanks. Sorry it didn't look clear. Shoulda had it make more sense. |
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