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Post by WAIF on Sept 11, 2014 15:50:35 GMT -5
WAIF Twist the Knife 14':
I personally thought the show was a good build up show for Mania and the future as a whole. 4 months til mania!
Also I will be reviewing some shows soon. So if want to wait til I give yours a review I understand.
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Post by Deleted on Sept 12, 2014 1:05:47 GMT -5
Since you haven't gotten a reply yet I'll give it a go. Twist The Knife and Throw Salt In The Wound was too long a title I guess.
Liked the fact you were commentating but I'd like it better if you did stuff like ring introductions too. Maybe even add some entrance music too. If you need some I'd be happy to email you some. Not too big of a fan of the bird's eye view that you're taking pics from but I'll prob get used to it.
First match is pretty decent so far. Commentary isn't perfect but it's decent and I think it adds a lot. Showing a lot of improvement here. The 450 lariat was a bit unnatural due to the fact that he ran out of the ring to do it instead of doing it in a proper situation. What I mean is, if they were brawling outside of the ring, he should have knocked kofi back into the ring, backed up, and then when kofi looked groggy he should have gone for it. To give a different example, in my Pillman /Mox match, I didn't have Pillman and Mox go out to the ramp just so Pillman could hit the diving crossbody, I had them brawl and then pillman hit the crossbody so it felt natural and not just "He goes out of the ring just to do the move". Interrupted the flow of your match a bit, but wasn't too bad. Perhaps you could've done the powerbomb that he did afterwards before the 450 lariat, then you could've repeated the Kofi sequence that happened after the powerbomb, only this time it would be out to the ramp so he could do the 450 lariat and it would've been much more natural. Ok. I'm done now. Finish was pretty good but the match could've gone on a little bit longer. 3/5 match
CM Punk vs Angle.
Cringeworthy angle custom but I'm sure the match will be decent. Always nice to see feuds with history, and the commentary is a great benefit because most of the time, the only people who will recognize long time feuds in video feds are longtime followers, but with your commentary I can understand that these two have a long history without watching every single one of your shows. You've improved since last time a lot with your posing. Camera angles could be better though. I feel this match is a little too fast paced and should've had a little more matwork involved for two guys like Angle and Punk. This match wasn't as good as the last one, pretty short and the pacing was off.
Ambrose vs Cena
Liked this match. Still a little on the short side though. The reason there's not much to say here is I was watching the match and forgot that I was writing a review. I'm pretty sure you were the one who had Cena wrestling like the Prototype instead of Cena, right? I like that. I liked the sequence after cena won because it felt like you were exploring Ambrose's hardcore past but I think perhaps Cena could've been stretchered out to sell the injury more. I understand you might not have a stretcher though.
Cesaro vs Ziggler
Match of the night. Had some pretty good spots.
Jericho vs D-Bry
Bad choice to do this in the main event. It would've made much more sense to do this in a match not as far up on the card.
Things that were good -
Posing was pretty good.
Commentary added a lot to the show.
Pic quality was ok
Things that were bad -
The length of the matches. Most of them could've been longer.
There should've been more promos. With you commentating there's a lot you could've done with promos. And some of the wrestlers could've used more mic time.
The name of the show.
The main event. Should've been an actual main event instead of not being a match at all. This kind of thing is sacrilege to do as a main event, but would've been OK if the match was lower on the card.
Things that could be improved -
I think entrance themes could add a lot to the overall presentation of the show, since you have crowd noise and annoucing.
Match length.
Match pacing, although this problem was only really highlighted by Angle/Punk.
And one more thing that a lot of people don't do, but I think is a cool thing to do, is to give all of your wrestlers some TV time one way or another.
I give this show a 7/10.
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Post by PRIME Wrestling on Sept 12, 2014 6:40:29 GMT -5
Every time your fed goes to improve, you ruin it with something else. Holy shit, the commentary part of this is horrid. Do not ever do something like this again. I cannot stress this enough. Never again.
And really, these CAWs need to be banleted from your fed. And that piledriver off of the top was such an awful spot. Cena would actually be dead. Think about what you do before you just do it, Davonni.
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Post by WAIF on Sept 12, 2014 7:24:17 GMT -5
Every time your fed goes to improve, you ruin it with something else. Holy shit, the commentary part of this is horrid. Do not ever do something like this again. I cannot stress this enough. Never again. And really, these CAWs need to be banleted from your fed. And that piledriver off of the top was such an awful spot. Cena would actually be dead. Think about what you do before you just do it, Davonni. If it did hinder you from enjoying the show or even watching the show. I made this version. WAIF Twist the Knife: |
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Post by PRIME Wrestling on Sept 12, 2014 8:40:55 GMT -5
Every time your fed goes to improve, you ruin it with something else. Holy shit, the commentary part of this is horrid. Do not ever do something like this again. I cannot stress this enough. Never again. And really, these CAWs need to be banleted from your fed. And that piledriver off of the top was such an awful spot. Cena would actually be dead. Think about what you do before you just do it, Davonni. If it did hinder you from enjoying the show or even watching the show. I made this version. WAIF Twist the Knife: Why make two versions? I doubt anyone is enjoying the commentary. They probably just muted it while watching it. |
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Post by Deleted on Sept 12, 2014 9:27:07 GMT -5
If it did hinder you from enjoying the show or even watching the show. I made this version. WAIF Twist the Knife: Why make two versions? I doubt anyone is enjoying the commentary. They probably just muted it while watching it. I for one enjoyed it. Wasn't perfect, heck wasn't even great but at least he showed an effort and it came out okay. |
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Post by King Of Spice on Sept 12, 2014 9:28:55 GMT -5
Watched this earlier, and I guess I'll review it.
Matches were better, posing improved, as did pacing and other things.
But Davonni, with all due respect, your commentary was horrid. It was hard to understand and just so cringeworthy. Man oh man, please stick to music. I had to mute it. I'm so sorry. But your matches improved.
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Post by Deleted on Sept 12, 2014 9:30:26 GMT -5
Watched this earlier, and I guess I'll review it. Matches were better, posing improved, as did pacing and other things. But Davonni, with all due respect, your commentary was horrid. It was hard to understand and just so cringeworthy. Man oh man, please stick to music. I had to mute it. I'm so sorry. But your matches improved. I'm literally the only one in the world who liked it, aren't I? |
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Post by King Of Spice on Sept 12, 2014 9:38:18 GMT -5
Watched this earlier, and I guess I'll review it. Matches were better, posing improved, as did pacing and other things. But Davonni, with all due respect, your commentary was horrid. It was hard to understand and just so cringeworthy. Man oh man, please stick to music. I had to mute it. I'm so sorry. But your matches improved. I'm literally the only one in the world who liked it, aren't I?   |
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Post by Deleted on Sept 12, 2014 10:37:19 GMT -5
I'm literally the only one in the world who liked it, aren't I? I don't think it's bad, it's decent, and different. |
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Post by King Of Spice on Sept 12, 2014 11:38:55 GMT -5
I don't think it's bad, it's decent, and different. It's pretty bad. I can only be honest. |
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Post by PRIME Wrestling on Sept 12, 2014 11:41:26 GMT -5
I don't think it's bad, it's decent, and different. It's pretty bad. I can only be honest. Yeah it's not good. Like the mark out stuff sounds stupid because it's not genuine because it's his own fed and he recorded it. And his Mic is really close to his mouth and he breathes into it and it pierces my eardrums. |
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Post by Gnaddi on Sept 12, 2014 12:01:37 GMT -5
Great improvement on posing and pacing like Ziggly said. I really liked the german to the outside. I don´t know what to say about the commentary. It is pretty weird, especially after one match ended and the next one starts. It´s kinda cool to explain the storylines and stuff but I would rather see you using music in the future.
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Post by FWL on Sept 12, 2014 14:51:00 GMT -5
Not a bad show. I think the posing and pacing has definitely improved. You're getting better with sequences and everything like that.
Here's my opinion on the commentary. It's different. No one else does it, and it definitely has advantages to furthering your storylines and things like that. The commentary itself could definitely be better, but the only real way to get better at it is to keep doing it. I say stick with it if you enjoy it. People can always mute it if they don't like it.
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Post by WAIF on Sept 14, 2014 9:47:37 GMT -5
Thanks for the reviews guys.
The reason I do commentary is honestly mainly for brick. Also it is a easy way to make it so that people aren't just sitting down looking at pictures for 15 minutes. It ho gets boring. Plus it doesn't get me copyrighted.
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